I’m appying to medical school. I have written this draft and went over it with m

I’m appying to medical school. I have written this draft and went over it with my friends. I wrote about a really personal inciedent and I wanna make sure the essay make sense to someone who doesnt know me.
Here are some questions you may want to consider while writing the essay:
Why have you selected the field of medicine?
What motivates you to learn more about medicine?
What do you want medical schools to know about you that has not been disclosed in other sections of the application?
In addition, you may wish to include information such as:
Unique hardships, challenges, and obstacles that may have influenced your educational pursuits.
Comments on significant fluctuations in your academic record not explained elsewhere in your application